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Post by Garrett Mon Jun 18, 2012 1:22 pm

Jessica, who is still my girlfriend, has a nice little career started in early child education, but she wants to go to grad school. She's been looking in the following places:

Boston, Massachusetts
Raleigh/Durham, North Carolina
Chicago, Illinois
Austin, Texas

and a few out of the country places. I believe she'll go to one of these fancy places, because she's serious about this stuff. If I'm still dating her, I'll go to, because I don't have anything keeping me here.

I only bring this up because there seems to be a board member or two in all the locations she chooses. It's all still in the air, of course.
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Post by NOT MONGO Mon Jun 18, 2012 2:35 pm

interdesting
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Post by Soylent Brown Mon Jun 18, 2012 2:56 pm

Is she looking at any schools in WA? Because that's where we're going. Or OR, but probably WA, at least initially.
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Post by Garrett Mon Jun 18, 2012 3:02 pm

I don't remember one coming up. I think she said something about portland, but it might have been about the show Portlandia.

I'll ask, but everything depends on having a school with a good program, and her getting funding. I wouldn't mind ending up in the Oregon/Washington area.
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Post by NOT MONGO Mon Jun 18, 2012 3:27 pm

i doubt id see garrett if he moved near boston. ive never even met brandy
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Post by NOT MONGO Mon Jun 18, 2012 3:29 pm

id definitely be open to meeting anyone from here though.
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Post by Garrett Mon Jun 18, 2012 3:50 pm

Jessica went to college at Wellesley, so Boston is high on her list of choices. Her best friend already said she'd move over there too.

Brandy is worth meeting.
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Post by Robo-Pussy Mon Jun 18, 2012 6:17 pm

Cool. All those cities are supposedly pretty awesome. I'd imagine I'll end up applying to med school in all of those areas.

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Post by Garrett Tue Jun 19, 2012 1:09 pm

I'm really hoping I can publish my book and get a fresh start wherever we go.

I've wanted to get away from Santa Rosa for a long time too. Too many bad memories.
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Post by Snoogans Sat Jun 30, 2012 5:07 pm

Come to my state, Garrett!
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Post by Garrett Sat Jun 30, 2012 5:57 pm

I was actually leaning toward North Carolina because the cost of living is 1/3rd less there than here, but the minimum wage is almost the same. That shows how old I'm getting
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Post by Vezmus Sat Jun 30, 2012 7:43 pm

F minimum wage

you should be shooting for at least middle class

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Post by Garrett Sat Jun 30, 2012 10:10 pm

I'm aiming at novelist, which would put me in the middle class, I imagine. Unless I get real lucky.
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Post by Vezmus Sun Jul 01, 2012 3:06 am

About this book...I know you don't know me that well, but I love to read. I read at least one book a week. I would love for you to let me read it.

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Post by Garrett Sun Jul 01, 2012 10:28 pm

I'm powering through a 4th draft because apparently 80,000 words is the sweet spot, and I'm a little short. I'm happy to send out drafts after that. It'll be a couple weeks.

I don't know if its good, but that isn't always a prerequisite to success.
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Post by Vezmus Sun Jul 01, 2012 11:31 pm

Right

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Post by Garrett Tue Jul 10, 2012 5:10 pm

I was at 60,000, which I thought was good enough, but as I write, and I'm at just under 75,000, I realize that I needed this stuff to be there.

It'll make a big difference really.
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Post by NOT MONGO Tue Jul 10, 2012 5:35 pm

synopsis?
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Post by donk Tue Jul 10, 2012 5:47 pm

Well, it's a scifi/fantasy thriller. this is from my query letter:

"The Flames in the Forehead of the Morning Sky tells the stories of two individuals whose lives run parallel in a busy metropolis. E. H. Bendis, a young programmer and inventor, whose ambitions exceed his abilities, finds himself at the center of a multidimensional conspiracy when he discovers that his creation holds more secrets than even he knew. Catherine Chalmers, a crafty corporate engineer goes rogue when she thinks she's solved a puzzle left behind by an elusive man whose shadow cast a pall of darkness over the entire city. Paths cross and tensions run deep and as they desperately attempt to preserve the world they know from being destroyed."
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Post by donk Tue Jul 10, 2012 5:47 pm

oh no, I've given away too much!
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Post by Garrett Tue Jul 10, 2012 5:49 pm

donk is my ghost writer.
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Post by Garrett Mon Jul 16, 2012 7:57 pm

I'm done now, aside from the glossary I want to add.

being sci-fi/fantasy, there are a good deal of things I invented that could use proper explanations.

it's just over 81,000 words, and I think this time it's finally a book. maybe not the best book, but it's much better to be done than good.
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Post by Soylent Brown Mon Jul 16, 2012 11:04 pm

How different is it from the version I read in Jan of last year?
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Post by Garrett Tue Jul 17, 2012 12:57 am

super different. two revisions ago.

this one will be like, 100 pages longer.

I have some minor editing, but I'd be happy to send you a new copy in a few days, if you have time to read it.
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Post by Soylent Brown Tue Jul 17, 2012 3:21 am

yes, please!
A few days is perfect. We're going to WA. I can read it when I get back. YAY!
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Post by NOT MONGO Wed Jul 18, 2012 12:55 am

has jess decided yet? come to boston and ill buy you a beer!
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Post by Garrett Thu Jul 19, 2012 2:09 am

no, she's working full time and exhausted. can't worry about it. I don't expect this to be sorted out until much later.
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Post by Vezmus Thu Jul 19, 2012 4:36 am

Stephen Baxter is my favorite sci-fi, but his characters can be bland at times.

please send to vezmus@gmail.com

I can give you as much or as little feedback as you like.

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Post by Garrett Thu Jul 19, 2012 2:52 pm

It's sent.

I'd prefer all of the feedback. I'll be irritated at first, but once I process it, I can use that information to improve.
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Post by Garrett Fri Aug 03, 2012 5:19 pm

Well, all those comments aside, it's still a work in progress. I'm editing again, and I plan to add 3 or 4 more short chapters for the Tim character early on, since he doesn't appear proper until chapter 65 or so.

Seriously though, no one who I give this to ever gives me feedback. If it's because it's bad, that's okay, I still need to know what to change. I just feel like at this rate, it must be so fucking bad that I should give up and kill myself now.

The only thing I can get agents to read is my query letter, and the best I've gotten from them is that it's a terrible, vague, uninteresting query letter.
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Post by Soylent Brown Fri Aug 03, 2012 11:56 pm

It's taking me a while to finish reading it, but I am adding some comments into the document. I wasn't sure if you actually wanted feedback.
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Post by NOT MONGO Sat Aug 04, 2012 2:43 am

i would also like to read it, G... send to mike.simpson1985@gmail.com
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Post by Garrett Sat Aug 04, 2012 8:35 pm

I'll send it, but let me do a few things. I'm going to write an exciting new opening to tie it all together, and maybe some more. also naming chapters.
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Post by Vezmus Sat Aug 04, 2012 10:25 pm

Really good story Garrett. It's worth the trouble, honestly. I don't think it's particularly well written, but that is something you are are going to accept and grow from. The potential is 100% there because the creativity and story building are there. You need skill, and nobody is born with skill, only talent. I'm planning to send you a very tl;dr email about every minor detail that crosses my mind, both positive and negative.

Cliffs:

[x] Talent
[ ] Skill

Don't be disheartened.


p.s. Garrett loves taking showers.

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Post by Garrett Wed Aug 08, 2012 12:16 pm

Thanks.

I took a great shower this morning.
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Post by Soylent Brown Thu Aug 09, 2012 2:28 am

My shower gets slugs. It's pretty frightening.
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Post by Garrett Thu Aug 09, 2012 12:54 pm

That's less good.

I had to take cold showers for a few weeks last summer because the hot water got turned off somehow.

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Post by Garrett Sat Aug 25, 2012 7:43 pm

Today she said she feels more and more like Chicago is the right place to go.

My recent rewrite has taken a bit longer than I expected, but I'm trying to get it right. I want it to be done by friday though. Setting arbitrary deadlines helps me get things done.
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